Sunday, September 9, 2018

FIRE ESCAPE First Draft Update for 9/8/18: The End (No, seriously, the first draft is done!)

HOLY CATS!  I FINISHED THE FIRST DRAFT.

Amazingly, the final words in the first draft of FIRE ESCAPE follow below.  Please let me know what you think!  Now is when I need feedback.  Reach out to me on TwitterIG, or FB. Or visit pete.ink and use the form there to connect with me.

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"YOU CAN'T SEE THAT?" I said, once again pointing to the dimension-eating monster behind me.

She paused for a moment, seeming to realize something was wrong.

"Is something wrong?  Are you in danger?"

It was like that moment when you go to the doctor and they ask "How are you?" and you're like "I'M HERE, AREN'T I?"

"YES!!" I yelled pointing behind me again, adding: "AND YOU'RE IN DANGER, TOO!"

"What's that?"

I pointed directly at her.  "You are in danger, too!!"

"Um, what?"  She went silent for a moment but her lips were still moving.  I started shaking my head gesturing to my ears.

"Dr, Ellsworth, I can't hear you!"  That was when it hit me--maybe this is where she dies--disappearing in an alternate dimension that collapsed on us.  I knew I could not let that happen.  I moved to hold her hands.  As I reached for them, my hands passed through her's with some strange static-electricity-like energy passing through both of us.  I backed away from her as she looked surprised.

I still couldn't hear her as she tried to speak.

I was about to morph again and start trashing things when suddenly, I could hear her again.

"I told you, we're phasically out of sync.  I'm not really here.  That's why I'm having trouble understanding you.  Not all of the sound vibrations you are making reach my dimension."

"Sound isn't.  What about light?"  I had literally just though about how Kate might approach this problem.  Ellsworth eyed me for a moment.  I pointed to my mouth and spoke. "Read my lips!"

She smiled and nodded.

"So, we're seeing into each other's dimensions but are not able to interact," I said. She nodded and spoke very loudly, not understanding that I could hear her just fine.  "The fabric between the dimensions is allowing us to see but not interact!  Yes."

"I can hear you, no need to yell."

"OH.  Oh.  Sorry!"

I realized I had to explain everything quickly and in a way she could easily read my lips.

"This dimension is collapsing."

Her face went pale.  Her brow furrowed.

"There is a big, uh, I don't know, anomaly, that is surrounding this town and is slowly compressing it into nothing."

She looked horrified.

"Dr. Ellsworth: do you know how to stop something like this?"

She looked genuinely distraught and shook her head.

I threw my hands up.

"I'm sorry!  I barely got to this point!" She was yelling again.

I smiled and shrugged.

"Then there is nothing to be done," I said smiling.

"I'm so sorry."

"It's OK."

"Is it me? Is it my trimensional breacher that is doing this?"

"I don't think so.  Maybe?  This dimension has been slowly collapsing for a very long time and only recently got this fast."

"The anomaly, what does it look like?"

I smiled and took a moment to think of how to describe it.  "A monster."

"With claws and teeth?"

I shook my head.  "Imagine the laws of physics turned against themselves."
She looked horrified.

"You should go," I said, looking back at the monster as it was now a hundred feet away.  "You don't need to see this.  In fact, you won't be able to see this."

"Why?"

"This dimension will collapse and everything will cease to exist.  Since you can't see the anomaly,
it'll just look like the buildings and roads and me fading out, I'd guess."

"I don't want to go.  I want to learn.  Why is your dimension collapsing?"

"It's not mine.  I'm just a tourist, like you."

"What?"

"Yep.  The work you do--well, I can't tell you how important it is but I can tell you that my big sister is a huge fan of yours."

"What's her name?"

"That doesn't matter--just know that you and your work does matter."

Tears started to fall from here eyes as I could feel the pull of the maelstrom.  It had gotten stronger.  It was like a cascade effect.  It was pulling me away from Ellsworth.  I tried to fight it, but it was so much stronger than before.  Then I remembered--to change.  "Memories."

But it wasn't enough.

Suddenly, Ellsworth, what was left of Isaac Newtown, the sky, the air, the everything was gone.  It was just me.  My change had kept me alive--strong enough to weather the collapse of a dimension--pretty bad ass.  But now what?  Certainly, my biological functions eventually require sustenance.  I don't know how long it was before I decided what to do next.

What did I decide to next?

Remember.

THE END

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